Nowadays, most people in our society are affected by big chains and well-known designers who little by little have introduced a skinny human figure, which is almost impossible to get. And what’s more this situation and the obsession with being fit usually go hand-in-hand.
Firstly, as far as I’m concerned I think a lot of people are excessively worried about their appearance. I agree we should take care of our image. However, we get obsessed. This fact may have consequences such as health disorders and diseases.
Therefore, the government had better be involved in this issue. The way they could manage to end up with it would be encouraging teenagers to wear a normal size through advertisements and not allowing tiny models to work as such as many girls are influenced.
Salomé Mir Sánchez
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ReplyDeleteThe obsession for a thin figure is developing among young girls and it is caused by the media. I agree we have to tell the difference between keeping a good figure and trying to keep an impossible figure. (Elil’s comment)
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