Eating habits is a very important topic because it affects every person. Nowadays it's a problem for a lot of people.
In my opinion, consumers should change their eating habits for a lot of reasons. On the one hand, people can change their eating habits. They should change their lifestyle because nowadays the lifestyle is very fast and people haven't time in order to eat. On the other hand, people should change their mentality since eating habits is a very important problem. However, it is very difficult for people to change their lifestyle.
In conclusion, consumers should change their eating habits in order to be healthy.
David Tomaseti Gómez, 2n batx. A
Hi!
ReplyDeleteI think that your conclusion could be longer, but I like the topic. I don't agree with you, on the contrary, I feel that people change a lot their lifestyle and teenagers, nowadays, are to obssesed with eating habits.
I think that this essay is a bit short, Yoy should write a little more, such as in your introducton or in your conclusion. And I think that you should search for a rich vocabulary,then your marks will be higher.
ReplyDeleteTomaseti, I think that this essay it short too. Besides you didn't structurate this essay as an opinion essay but from my point of wiew the arguments are good.
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